Here is Fantasy/Reality part 49! Please read it and leave a comment on it. I appreciate any feedback I can get. It's my fuel for writing.
Fantasy/Reality Part 49
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I love it how Nick is turning into a gentleman. He's so sweet...
ReplyDeleteHowever... pregnant or not I would have taking Nick right then and there! LOL!
Great update!
Great update!
ReplyDeleteI do llke how you are writing this story again. Nick asking the doctor about having sex was too funny but its true, most men ask that question.
I thought the scene when Nick wants to have sex with viola was funny! Although I would like to see Viola come out of her shell/comfort zone and be with him. I know she has issues with him but she needs to let them go and try to just go with the flow.
I like that you are finally bringing in the families,the boys & the paparazzis. I don't see how something like that can go hidden for so long. I hope though that the fans don't look at her like Aarons "left overs" as you put it. I know its hard for anyone to suddenly adjust to fame but I hope that for Viola that she doesnt act like a scared and upset kinda of girl everytime someone says something bad to her.
Nick is really trying to prove himself and he is doing a great job so far, except for the part where he wants to name his son a JR. To me that really does not seem like something Nick would really do. I'm excited though that they are moving along in their relationship.
Hurry back with the next update!
Brittany
hey! i can't read the chapter :(
ReplyDeletei don't know if this is my problem or what..plz could you tell me if this is just me? i want to read it!! lol
haha. yeah she really was something rejecting his advances. ive been a vegetarian for a year but you made me want a freakin nick carter grilled sandwich. haha thanks!
ReplyDeleteIs anyoneelse haing a problem loading it up to be able to read it??
ReplyDeleteIs anyoneelse haing a problem loading it up to be able to read it??
ReplyDeleteI also love how Nick is being so caring. I didn't like how she said "You said to give you 2 weeks to proove you could take care of me and you were doing fine up until now" thats like a huge slap in the face.
ReplyDeleteI know she has issues with him, but she needs to get over it, it seems like he's changed for good. Plus she needs to realize that every man has there limits and will only wait so long haha.
I wouldn't care if I was pregnant or not, I'd be jumping his gun every damn day (pardon the language but its true lol).
I hope she doesn't become a whiney girlfriend that complains everytime a fan said something bad about her. I'm sure there are alot of people out there that really do that but still. She should grow a back bone and not even go there. You'd be just asking to get your feelings hurt if you were dating him and checking to see what people said about you.
It was a great chapter, but I say the next chapter should have LOTS of steamy make up sex lol. She needs to give in already haha.
Hey Jocelyn. How is everything? anyway i really liked this chapter of F/R. I could almost hear Nick talking in it like at the end when he said "The Nick's are taking over heheh" I could almost hear his funny laugh. You did a really great job and i really do think that if nick had a son he would name if after himself. But in my opinion I would never name a child a jr bc then its just annoying and repetitve.Do you think in real life, Nick would ever get married and have kids? bc i heard he hates marriage bc he dosent want to make the mistakes his parents did. but somone should tell him that he's a different person than his parents and he's in charge of his destiny so it dosent have to turn out negative.
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ReplyDeleteGreat update. I was laughing so much with this chapter I have to quote two of my favorite lines
Viola- "But I'm hungry"
Nick - "I've got something for you to suck on" (ooo so dirrty!!)
and
"Nick sighed. But the twins wont even know what we're doing. They probably don't even have their eyes completely grown in yet." (Too funny!)
I also luv the fact that Nick can cook. That's always a plus in my book especially since I don't know how to cook anything but hot dogs and frozen pizza!
Contrary to the other folks who left a comment, I'm on Viola's side with the whole sex thing. I'd feel pretty weird having sex while I'm pregnant.
And why are us women so mean?!? When we see our crush (celeb or regular guy) with someone else, all of a sudden the chick an ugly fat gold diggin bitch and we don't even know them. I confess that I'm guilty of doing this, but hey we should learn be happy for them (cough, cough) right?
NEWayz, great update you're the best!!!
LaShonda
Hey Jocelyn. I am really liking the fact that you are making nick into a kind loving funny guy. This chapter was funny and also liked how they was albsolutly no fighting in this chapter or the one before it. from, Danielle
ReplyDeleteNikki- I’m with you. If Nick knocked me up I wouldn’t resist his advances!
ReplyDeleteBrittany – I think it’s interesting you and other readers find what I write funny. When I write, I have no intention of being funny. I just what I envision in my mind and I can’t predict how you and other readers will react. Viola is trapped in her shell and she has quite a while to go before she can completely let go with him. This is her first relationship so this is all new territory for her. I’m working on fluidly inserting family, paparazzi/media, and Backstreet into the story. I don’t want them to just suddenly appear from nowhere. Fans are vicious and it recently showed with the pictures of Nick and Lauren from March 18th. It’s just a sad reality I had to incorporate into the story. She was seen publicly with Aaron first so fans will associate her with him first.
Fernanda – I hope you were able to read the chapter! If you didn’t please let me know.
Mary – Viola may reject him now but we’ll just have to see how long she can do it. Congrats on being a vegetarian for a year. I couldn’t do that. I love meat too much. I took the grilled chicken sandwich from the People magazine caption. I’m curious to try one!
Anonymous – Like I told Fernanda I hope you were able to get the chapter to load. If you didn’t please let me know.
Jessica – I was actually stuck on that part when I wrote the “You said to give you 2 weeks…” line. I couldn’t think of a smooth transition so I ended up writing that. Viola does have issues and she’s dealing them in her own way. I do agree with you that if I was preggers with Nick’s baby I’d be jumping his gun everyday too and you don’t have to pardon the language with me hehe I appreciate it. There is definitely a lot of sexual tension between them and we’ll just have to see if Viola lets him inside or not lol
Melissa – Everything is going all right. I just wish I had a steady job but I’m enjoying the spare time I have to focus on my writing. Thank you for saying you could almost hear Nick talking in it. It tells me that I’m writing properly. I know I hate it when I’m reading a story and I hear the writer’s voice instead of the characters voice. I do agree that naming a child Jr. is repetitive but I think for this story it fits. Nick doesn’t strike me as the marriage type of guy but I think he’s capable of marrying if he wants to.
LaShonda – I am very flattered my writing can make you laugh so much. Like I mentioned with Brittany, it amazes me that my writing can incite laughter. When I write, I really don’t intend on making people laugh. I just write because it’s what I see in my mind and it feels right. Thank you for taking the time to quote you favorite lines! I was actually afraid the “I’ve got something for you to suck on” line would seem weird and I almost took it out. I’m glad I left it in now.
I would sure hope Nick can cook since he’s got a banging hot bod now and he’s cut down on the naughty fast food. I don’t know how to cook either and it’s sad because my mom cooks really well. I’m really good at eating though!
Women are mean and judgmental. People are already criticizing Nick’s latest girlfriend Lauren on the livedaily message board but its part of being in the spotlight.
Danielle – It took a while but the kind loving funny guy Nick is slowly emerging. A lot of the crap he went through has really opened his eyes. Thank you for thinking it was funny and the fights were very unpopular so I had to slowly deviate from them.
I know she has issues with him but she needs to let them go and try to just go with the flow.
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